here is an unfinished poem of mine I need your thoughts ;)
Have you guys ever went through your poems and sometimes asked..what? These don't make sense! Well I just went through that tonight and wondered through half of them what I was on when I wrote them.
I am trying to come up with a good poem to post here.
THis is all I have for one so far:
Time created us a monster
Cold on the inside
We believed it's creation
Couldn't take over change
We fall to any standards
of its form
Forgetting any remorse
we do what we have to do
It takes away our passion for longing
for what once was ours
but gives reasoning to why we don't belong
I can't put into words for you
but you know why I cannot stay
In the end its better this way
It didn't take away our shadows
of things that were put into place long ago
We will never be lost or forgotten
so will you remember always
will you remember always
okay thats all I have.. what do you think so far?
Who says you can't be naughty and nice.
Thanks goes to Stephie for my cute avatar!
Re: here is an unfinished poem of mine I need your thoughts
Me likey.. It's a bit unfinished looking in the word structure but I dig it that way.. It's more open to interpretation like that..
Goooo Michelle *resists doing the cabbage patch dance *
here is an unfinished poem of mine I need your thoughts ;)
Kinda sounds like the poetry I write so I guess I'd like it
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