Lord Of The Punishment
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(3/7/06 5:53 pm) Reply
The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussion
Well, here it is. I want to know what do you think about it. This time, though, I'll go with it until the end, so don't worry I don't want to offend anyone by using your characters without permission, so I'll ask you if I can. Probably becuase I want to continue with this "New Age" series I know Lumpy agrred to let me use his character.
Lord Of The Punishment
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(3/8/06 6:05 am) Reply
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
Hmmm.... I thought I did. The fact is tah I did iit on word, and added lot of multimedia stuff, like, for example, a second chapter title in aurabesh (which I erased when posting it here) and usually when I copy and paste some mistakes like taht can happen. Thanks!
Bspacewiz2 Death Tot Commander
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(3/11/06 12:06 am) Reply
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
I like I like!!!
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
The story is good, however, there's one last thing that prevents it from being better. When you write the characters dialog, you don't indicate who's speaking. There's just a lot of back and forth banter, and it makes it very confusing. You could take a page from the OTR stories and use that format to show who's talking.
Lord Of The Punishment
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(3/12/06 1:46 pm) Reply
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
I could, yes, but I didn't do it because it looked more screenwriting for me. But if you prefer it that way, I'm going to edit it. Thanks
Lord Of The Punishment
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(4/24/06 9:41 am) Reply
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
Well, at this moment I'm busy with studies, but I'll try to update next week. By the way, here is a picture of Zorak:
Well, there is no pciture here. The picture I posted in teh story is better.
Sorry I couldn't update for so long, I have been really busy. But since I didn't go to school today, and since I will not go tomorrow, I had a free day. So, I finally updated. Again, sorry!
P.D.: I revised last update, and saw MANY errors, I fixed the ones I saw. And, I added a couple of pictures. Hope you enjoy!
Edited by: Dark Soul Warrior at: 5/26/06 6:28 pm
Lord Of The Punishment
Posts: 194
(9/2/06 6:14 pm) Reply
Re: The Silly Wars - New Age - EpI: SOK Review and Discussio
Sorry for taking too long. No, I haven't updated yet. But before you start blaming me of leaving it incomplete as the others, I will NOT do it! I just have been extremely busy with school, and I have no time. In fact, in 10 days I'm leaving for some time, so I'll probably not update until next month. But I promise I will as soon as I can!
I don't want to offend anyone by using your characters without permission, so I'll ask you if I can. Probably becuase I want to continue with this "New Age" series 
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