Traveller in the arts
Posts: 50
(5/7/02 11:04 am) Reply
Ang-el's farewell song
I think
if you
kiss me where my heart beats
my shaded, sick-dripping shadows
couldn't bear to watch
if you pull me close
enough to cut my skin
on the geometry of your bones
these monsters couldn't follow
your tongue, your teeth on my breast
could call out these
red-painted things hiding in the sharp edges
that ache after dark
I think that
your body inside mine
your pursuit
and my capture
the ache and tension
of you deep in my belly
could chase away this
chattering madness
that threatens and begs
and bleeds me from old scars
could drive away
could drive away
could drive away
the phantoms haunting this fading galaxy
and hallow me
ocean-pure
You can touch me if you want
You can touch me if you want
You can
Traveller in the arts
Posts: 18
(5/8/02 5:19 pm) Reply
Re: Ang-el's farewell song
Wed.Morning,
Nothing to crit on this one, but then I never seem to see anything in yours I want to crit. Maybe every once in a while!
This is so conflicting. I feel passionate needing so jarring contrasted against the hurt, like a plea for relief. It's a wonderful mix of emotions, all strong, all clear. I love it.
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